Dear College Dean:

I am writing this letter to inform you on how it would be best for the large donation to be spent. You have two options, one expand the bookstore or two add more computers to the computer lab. To improve the quality of students lives you should add more computers. Many students don't have personal computers, by adding more you are improving students access to a computer.

Sure, you could expand the bookstore but is it really necessary. Does the college have enough computers available for students? I don't think so.

Thank you for your time, students quality of life will improve if you have more computers available.

This paper takes a position on the issue defined in the prompt, but the first half of the paper is simply a repetition of the prompt.  The writer makes one point supporting his or her position, but other than one statement and two questions, there is no development of the writer's position.  The reader is left wondering: Why do students need more access to computers?  Why is the bookstore adequate as it is?  How will students' quality of life be improved if more computers are available?  In addition, the writing shows poor control of sentence structure, grammar, and mechanics.  This short paper includes three incorrect sentences (comma splices).  Some punctuation is missing (e.g., a question mark in the second paragraph).